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Inspired by the responsiveness to Elaine's poems, I decided to showcase some of my poetry in the hopes of getting feedback from you guys. Most of my poems were created after important or eye-catching events or scenes that I experienced. I usually don't get many poems written in a short time because I like to give my works a lot of thought and perfect them as much as possible. Nevertheless, I will try my best to occasionally update this thread.
Snow
Year written: 2008
The first decent poem I've ever written in my life. I was a kid back then, and I was quite fascinated by snow.
After leaves fall and the orange theme disappears,
Comes fluffy cotton: so gentle, so clear.
Smiles show, happiness blazes, kids fly
To a known world covered in a white dye.
Pines, cypresses and oaks all clothed in white,
While houses lay dormant at the ice-cold rise,
Standing, lifeless, just gazing through.
Woods crackle in chimneys inactive all awhile,
People embracing blankets, looking fragile!
But I’m standing all alone, watching flakes of snow,
Coming down solemnly with a mild glow.
My heart uncontrollably goes and flows,
Quietly, effectively, praising the winter-rose.
An island driven out far to the sea
Served quietly for all its folk,
When suddenly, as soon as it could be,
A rumble from a volcano freely broke.
It all aggravated to a longer roar;
A howl, a crackle, then a mightier growl,
Till boom! Holler! The explosion did soar
Creating a patch of disastrous foul.
Lumps of rock and magma flew
Erupting and terrorizing all that’s around,
The sky so illuminated, what a view,
The clouds all burnt, what a bound!
Cloaks of smoke hazed beyond the sight,
Pressed on people, choking them alive.
Stupendous lava burning so bright,
Scorching the lands with no revive.
The air so stifling, the flames galore,
Painted the world with a catastrophic décor,
Fate has ordered no peace is achieved,
Thus a volcano was well-received.
That day the world closed
Like a rose stripped of bloom,
Like a paper being fold,
Life just wrapped in gloom.
That day I burst into tears:
What to do? Where to start?
With thoughts of utter fear
Slashing my lonesome heart.
I looked upon this earth
Frightened of what I see:
A dark plain stripped of mirth,
Colourless, very uneasy.
That day I lost all hope,
A tragic life, with no support,
Falling off a steep slope,
With no happiness of any sort.
This daunting day I’ll never forget,
All wrongs I did, I’ll ever regret,
This day, my memory will never acclaim,
The day when I, an orphan became.
And amidst the night the killers move
To where the king of all resides;
Daggers tearing the air to remove
What stands of Rome's dirty pride.
And they approach him, murderously so,
Cimber grabbing and pulling him down,
While Casca made an attempt below
To stab the crying god's crown.
And while he tried to elude the strike,
Blinded by blood, he tripped and fell.
The faces of Liberals, with immense dislike,
Drowned the cacophony of stunned yells.
And they thrust themselves forcefully through,
Relentlessly stabbing at the mighty god,
Until one slash twitched his view
By a long-lost friend among the squad.
"And you too, Brutus?" the dying king asked,
Revealing the betrayal of a bitter age,
But the effect of such a fatal task,
Left the corpse in the big, wide stage.
And the slayers fled into the stormy sky,
To be met by a soundless sight,
And they parted themselves hoping to belie,
The wounds of an anguish bite.
2 – Aquablast, GalliumGrant
1 – 7dewott8
1 – ShadowWoah.....you're kind of totally awesome. I haven't written any poems (that I'd considered done for myself instead of just a school project...well, one last night, but it's rather short.) in a few years, so the more recent ones aren't really worth showcasing....anyway, digressing aside, it's quite obvious why you took first in the Literature Competition. Your vibrant word choice also makes the poems very interesting just to read, and the images evoked so clearly make contemplation even more fun
I'm kind of feeling like writing a poem myself now xD
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Woah.....you're kind of totally awesome. I haven't written any poems (that I'd considered done for myself instead of just a school project...well, one last night, but it's rather short.) in a few years, so the more recent ones aren't really worth showcasing....anyway, digressing aside, it's quite obvious why you took first in the Literature Competition. Your vibrant word choice also makes the poems very interesting just to read, and the images evoked so clearly make contemplation even more fun
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Bumping this thread in the hope that someone still cares to read the poems I compose.
Here's another poem of mine. It is the second most recent and also my second favourite poem out of all the ones I've written thus far, so I hope you guys will like it as much as I do.
The Assassination of Julius Caesar
Year written: Early 2011
Inspired by Shakespeare's "Julius Caesar" play in my English Literature class (which is based on true historical characters and events), I decided to write a poem for the assignment which our teacher gave us. It describes the murder of Julius Caesar by the Liberatores - a moment which I envision as dramatically shocking and thrilling.
And amidst the night the killers move
To where the king of all resides;
Daggers tearing the air to remove
What stands of Rome's dirty pride.
And they approach him, murderously so,
Cimber grabbing and pulling him down,
While Casca made an attempt below
To stab the crying god's crown.
And while he tried to elude the strike,
Blinded by blood, he tripped and fell.
The faces of Liberals, with immense dislike,
Drowned the cacophony of stunned yells.
And they thrust themselves forcefully through,
Relentlessly stabbing at the mighty god,
Until one slash twitched his view
By a long-lost friend among the squad.
"And you too, Brutus?" the dying king asked,
Revealing the betrayal of a bitter age,
But the effect of such a fatal task,
Left the corpse in the big, wide stage.
And the slayers fled into the stormy sky,
To be met by a soundless sight,
And they parted themselves hoping to belie,
The wounds of an anguish bite.
I'm impressed. Julius Caesar was my favorite Roman general. <3 His influences in Roman government are quite clear as he played a deciding niche in the gradual transformation of the Roman Republic into the Roman Empire. The poem has a lovely beat. The gentle flow, while describing a brutal assasination, fits well with your prior work.
1 – Shadow|
I'm impressed. Julius Caesar was my favorite Roman general. <3 His influences in Roman government are quite clear as he played a deciding niche in the gradual transformation of the Roman Republic into the Roman Empire. The poem has a lovely beat. The gentle flow, while describing a brutal assasination, fits well with your prior work.
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